Write 1 paragraph about your favorite memory from Cat Tien
Every moments in Cat Tien are memorable but there is one favorite moment that I want to remember for forever and always is the night when my bus, which is bus one went on safari night. It was the last Thursday night. At eight o'clock, we got on a jeep. I sat next to Sarryna. We both were very excited cause we had never been on a big jeep before, just the small one and now we were going with a large group of our friend. It was a cool night. We were able to see a lot of deers, an owl, some wild cats and a boar. I think my bus was having a lot of fun. We joked around and a lot of boys in my group made very hilarious jokes.After that, we came back to where we stayed and had camp fire as usual with roasted marshmallows. This would be the best trip I have so far. Thanks to AIS.
Your first sentence is long and it confuses me a little bit at the end. But it is still okay and I like the way you opened your paragraph. You have used descriptive language. Your paragraph flows well which is good and I mark you 10/12 <3
ReplyDeleteI don't think that I have done a good enough job on using academic words. I used normal-day-talking word. Real casual. I think my paragraph flows pretty well. They all in chronicle orders. I think readers can easily understand what I'm trying to say.I would give myself 9-10/12 :D
ReplyDeleteNice paragraph because my name is there.lol :]]
ReplyDeleteGoodd jobbb anyway <3.. I will give you 9+1/12 :)
Nice paragraph Tien
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ReplyDeletegood paragraph by the way
ReplyDeletethe paragraph is still good if ur name is not there:)
ReplyDeletei give u 9-10/12
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